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Into the Depths Part 1 The moon shone through the curtains in the library, and five ponies slept soundly. One began to stir. Rainbow Dash groaned and lifted her head. "Ouch," she mumbled. She touched the bandage on her head and winced. As Rainbow Dash's eyes adjusted to the darkness, she noticed two ponies sleeping nearby. She smiled as she realized who they were.

Fluttershy and Pinkie shared a sleeping bag and were lying alongside each other. Rainbow Dash couldn't help smiling at the sight of the yellow pony covering Pinkie with one of her wings. Pinkie had her face close to Fluttershy's ear, and she ruffled her mane with almost each breath. Both ponies slept sInto the Depths Part 1 by *PatRoison

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Trials and Tribulations Part 4 “Oh my princess, this library is enormous. How will we ever find what we need?” Rarity stood at the entrance of the law library with her jaw slack. The wing of the library was large enough to fit most of Ponyville within its walls, and the white unicorn was at a loss as where to begin her search. The sight was one thing, but the sound was another. The lack of sound would be a more accurate description. Every hoofstep echoed across the wing, and Rarity shrank on occasion out of fear that she stirred some pupil from their studies. The only calming element there was the smell. The old library smelled of rich oak and parchment. In Trials and Tribulations Part 4 by *PatRoison

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Interview With a Fillyfooler Part 3 "This is going to be so much fun! Come on Fluttershy, let's get to our table." Pinkie Pie bounced along with Fluttershy following behind. Applejack and Rainbow Dash were behind the happy couple.

Rainbow Dash nudged Applejack and said, "Look at them, AJ. How can you be against that?"

Applejack sighed and when she saw Rainbow smiling at their friends said, "You know I agree with you, Rainbow."

"Yeah, I know. I'm just messing with you. C'mon, let's eat."

The four ponies arrived at their table and Fluttershy was about to sit down, but was stopped by Pinkie.

"Allow me," Pinkie said as she slid out Fluttershy's chair.

"Oh, thank you, PInterview With a Fillyfooler Part 3 by *PatRoison

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Big Mac's Big Date "Well, I don't see you making that long walk down to Sugarcube Corner!"

Big Macintosh still had Caramel's words in his head even as he worked harder to ignore them. It was not that Caramel was wrong. Mac wanted to ask Pinkie Pie out for a while now, but he never quite figured out how. At least that excuse satisfied him until today. He knew how to ask Pinkie out on a date. The problem was that he could never think of an excuse to go and ask her out. He tried offering to take the Cakes their daily apple shipment, but Applejack would always insist on it so she could visit with Pinkie for a bit. Mac would never deny his little sister any chancBig Mac's Big Date by *PatRoison

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Interview With a Fillyfooler Part 2 "Now Twilight, this must be perfect. This will be their first real date."

Twilight Sparkle finished placing new curtains on the windows of the shop, "I get that Rarity, but I still don't understand why you're being so insistent on having the date here at your boutique."

The white unicorn turned to her friend and laughed, "I have my reasons, but rest assured that it is for Fluttershy."

Twilight tilted her head, "Why?"

"You know how timid the little creature can be. Just imagine the amount of stress she'll be under on a date." Rarity waved a hoof in front of her face, "No. I will not allow my dear friend to suffer any stress. She will Interview With a Fillyfooler Part 2 by *PatRoison

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Trials and Tribulations Part 3 "Ok Jackie, we're almost there. What's the plan?"

Applejack turned to the pink pony, "I should go in and enter this 'event', and ya'll stay outside and watch the crowd."

"Are you sure that's a good idea? I mean, wouldn't it be better to go in together?"

Applejack shook her head, "No. This is my mess, and I need to clean it up."

"And just how is getting hurt going to win back Fluttershy?"

The orange pony looked at her friend, "Ah, ah'm not in any real danger, Pinkie. This is a bar, but there's bound to be security on the place." She put a hoof on Pinkie's shoulder, "Ah ain' suicidal. If it's one thing ah plan on doing is settin' thiTrials and Tribulations Part 3 by *PatRoison

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Interview With a Fillyfooler Part 1       "Um, can I take the blindfold off now?" Fluttershy was being led down a hall and had no idea where it would lead.

      "Not yet," a cheerful voice said stifling laughter. Pinkie's voice did comfort the shy pony even if she sounded slightly off.

      It was not long before Fluttershy heard a door open, and she was led inside. She heard giggling and asked, "Who's there?"

      "Shh," Pinkie said, "We're Interview With a Fillyfooler Part 1 by *PatRoison

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Trials and Tribulations Part 2 "It's over?" Applejack's voice was soft but dripped with shock. "Just like that?"

Fluttershy tried to keep her eyes locked with Applejack's, "Please, Applejack. This is for the best. I love you, but..."

"But what," Applejack's voice was slightly louder and had some force behind it, "you love me, but not enough to give me another chance?"

Fluttershy looked to the ceiling, tears pooling in her eyes, "It's not that. You hurt me. I needed you."

"Ah know, and I will never be able to make up for what ah did to you, but don' ya think ah deserve a chance to try?"

"No."

"No? So that's it then? We're finished?"

Fluttershy looked back to Trials and Tribulations Part 2 by *PatRoison

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One Last Stab

Fri May 18, 2012, 12:29 PM

I figured, screw it, and tried once again for AppleShy to go on EqD. Should it be rejected, I'll leave it at that and just focus on DA and FimFiction.

On another note, I know I am terribly behind on the next PinkieShy. Not a whole lot of action in this one, and as a result, it still feels a little stilted and odd. I think there are enough cute moments with Fluttershy and Pinkie, and I'm adopting the nickname 'Flutters' for Fluttershy, who else

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Couple of things caused me to hit a snag. Most prominent is that my dad's chihuahua just had puppies. Three girls. So, yeah. There you go. Puppies are responsible for the delay in PinkieShy. Honest.

Well, it looks like EqD streamlined their rejection process. Just received the rejection that I knew would come. These are the reasons they gave me:
-Show VS Tell
-Poor pacing
-Flat writing
-Lack of a real title.
-Grammar/punctuation mistakes.

I have to admit, I'm surprised they didn't say 'Not a popular enough pairing' as one of the reasons.

Oh well, piss on them, I'll just focus here.

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Yes, There Will Be Tears

Mon May 14, 2012, 6:04 AM

sent me a link of a video she made. It's a dramatization from Him Part 6.

The scene is where Fluttershy speaks with the foal.

Here's the Youtube link: [link]

Prepare yourselves, for there will be tears.

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Which of these is the hardest to get past when you get stuck with a project?

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57 deviants said Fear that your work will be considered a disappointment?

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32 deviants said The blank page/canvas mocking you?

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22 deviants said Worrying that you'll be able to finish?

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~Molecular1 4 days ago Hobbyist Interface Designer

NP! Keep up the good work!

~NaturesRose May 14, 2012

Heya~! I made something for you [link] .
I really hope you like it, I worked my hardest making it!

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... Since I'm Nazrin.

I'm a Touhou-loving, pony-addicted gal~!

Strong fandoms can't be built on broken bases.

Wriggle Nightbug

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*Ragnarokia May 14, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

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~NaturesRose May 14, 2012

Thank you very much

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... Since I'm Nazrin.

I'm a Touhou-loving, pony-addicted gal~!

Strong fandoms can't be built on broken bases.

Wriggle Nightbug

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*PatRoison May 14, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Wow this was beyond awesome. I knew I wouldn't last a minute. I started to tear up at the "Why?", but when I got to the "What did I do wrong?" Yeah, I lost it.

I can't even begin to describe it. I felt brutal in my head when I wrote it, but this. This made me really feel the shared pain.

Just absolutely awesome work. May I share this via blog?

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Icon by: [link]

~NaturesRose May 14, 2012

The "Why?" was pretty hard to do; it took me a good amount of tries to get it the way I wanted.
And good! I worked extra hard on making "What did I do wrong?" as tear-jerking as possible.

I felt the same reading it. Really, like I said in the comment on that chapter a real while back, it's one of the most heart-wrenching and slightly heartwarming scenes I have ever read in fanfiction, maybe even of all written fiction. I'm really glad you felt I did it justice (^__^) .

Yes, absolutely!! I'd be honored if you did

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... Since I'm Nazrin.

I'm a Touhou-loving, pony-addicted gal~!

Strong fandoms can't be built on broken bases.

Wriggle Nightbug

Twilight Sparkle

*PatRoison May 14, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Both of those were really well done. I can't stop watching it, and yet still get choked up at those parts.

Mission accomplished. I'm gonna share this now, both here and on Fimfiction. It's just that awesome and powerful.

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*Ragnarokia May 6, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

I think I've found one of the worst problems with writing, having the perfect idea for the start and the end, but in the middle being unable to get something as good and making it effectively "filler"

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*PatRoison May 6, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

That's a pain. I hate that. It's one of my biggest worries in my AppleShy. I know where I want to go after Trials, but any idea I come up with for what's in between seems pretty crap.

Hope it doesn't take you long to get past it.

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*Ragnarokia May 6, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

I can understand the problem you feel, as you have kept the story going a long time and you keep introducing more stuff, so far it has all proven to be nice even if upsetting, but I suppose I can understand if it feels like you are just shoving in stuff for the hell of it at the moment, but I don't think it's like that. Sure you keep throwing in basically everything, but not QUITE everything, so you only throw in stuff that does end up working

Alas that is a problem that comes when you plan story to be 2 parts long and it turns into 50

Something needs to fill those gaps.

Luckily with 3 weeks / days at the moment it isn't to much of an issue, since I still have loads of ways it can go and it always seems to change anyway even if I want to keep it set so that seems to work for the time being which is nice. I am hoping it continues that way for future long stories.

Sadly more uniformed stories seem to get effected by it. I decided to make the next story specifically 5 parts long with each one planned a certain way, however due to that the middle ended up sort of being the in between bit, as I really want to write the end, and the middle doesn't seem to quite flow to it. It might not be as big issue as I am making it out but I get the fear someone might go "this bit isn't really as definitive as the rest." Well they wouldn't say that as no one in their right mind uses that word outside of stories, but you know.

I guess that is why I usually don't use written down plans, as I don't work well with them.

By the way I just came from Fimfiction and found this, I think you might love it as you mentioned you thought about a Devil May Cry crossover before [link] It's only just started but looks promising.

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